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Verrrry interesting. All I can think about are the businesses that would inevitably pop up to help deal with this

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You would.

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Dopamine sent.

I love this. I like the new beginning, but the old one was realllllly good. ☺️

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Oh man now you've got me second guessing if I should have just left it alone!

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It was a killer first line. It took my breath away when you read it aloud. You could keep the first line and still include the new beginning!

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I love the beginning. As someone who has used their phone for exactly that kind of reward, the gut punch of the vomit instead was extra powerful.

Thanks so much for joining us this month in our prompt celebration!

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Yeah what is the actual difference between computers and smartphones. How mobile could you make a computer, and not feel nauseous? HA, the testing these companies would go through to figure it out would be interesting. Does the phone have to be fully built to cause these negative effects? When in the process of building a phone do they begin? Fascinating.

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Asking the right questions. The hard ones. The ones I'd be asking if I had any intention of extending the story, which, mercifully, I do not.

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Ha! Fair. But short stories like this get the thoughts rolling, which is what you want :D

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You are correct, this is what I want.

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Hmm. Computers are fully mobile. 🤔

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I spoke to my lawyer, and he said, yes, I am legally obligated. Some law on the books from over a hundred years ago. So I liked and here I am commenting... never mind that I would have anyhow since this story was so fun. 😁

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I don't make the laws! But I appreciate your compliance :)

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Love.

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Great!

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Great story! Now if we could ever get this to come true in real life, maybe this world could be normal.

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Who says it was voluntary?

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