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“Muzzle flares perforate” - very nice verb here for this scene

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I wouldn't know from experience, but I imagine finding a great verb is the writing equivalent of a perfect layup.

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"Those last two pieces are really helpful because they’re still going on."

What with the title and the time of day, I was not prepared to laugh this hard so quickly.

Loving Marvy! Very fun chapter. Only thing that annoys me about this faceless person throwing the "kill switch" (besides, ya know, throwing the kill switch) is that that point why not just go full kamikaze and turn the soldiers into little bombs. Would've done the trick. Bad guys, eh? Too many limiting beliefs on their end.

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May 6, 2023
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What of Aragorn of Lord of the Rings? ;-)

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