Also BOOOO that Adam died. Friggin’ dagnabbit. I want to know more about how death works here, how humans/afterlife works, if he had become some sort of hybrid alien thing, if that is even an element of this universe, etcetera
I would also love to see from Adam’s perspective his last moments and the thoughts going through his head
Is there a clear way to know if we are in Jackson’s head vs Esther’s head at the beginning of these chapters? Usually with Esther we have that other character talking in all caps but I don’t know if I miss the Jackson differentiation. I knew when I got to “I had managed to completely convince myself that I hadn’t seen Rita invite Nali into some kind of space ship that night” and maybe you don’t want us to know until that moment, which if so it works perfectly. If not I was just mentioning it to mention it.
Alien shower sounds fun. Maybe it was enveloping from beneath? Or all sides at once? Or just normal but extra awesome haha
Daaaaaaang this is legitimately great drama with the confusing nature of Morning & Adam’s relationship. Now I also wanna know about Arch’s afterlife/death process.
Would have liked to know if the food tasted especially unique, or if it was a Narnia type thing where it was kind of whatever you wanted it to taste like kinda thing. Or if it had palpable healing/rejuvenation effects. Or if it was just like celestial burgers.
Fascinating. Just the name Nali and the flow of voice cued me in automatically that we were back in Jackson’s head. “Esther” as a third person confirmed it. Nice. 😻
Yeahhhh, I figured we’d lost Adam. Myyyyrh. You have a knack for investing me in really cool characters and then—YOINK! Ok, note to self. Don’t get attached. 😜 I think the discussion from the fire scenes stands even more now. With a little more mention of her frantic “where is he” you can build our hope through hers. Before you cruelly snatch it away! 😈😻😈 Esp because you do so through Jack’s eyes, not Esther’s heart. Otherwise this death feels a little detached and abrupt.
I laughed quite loudly when Rita swiped the floor away. Loving the look at our new home for the moment, and I squeeeeed when you delivered The Title!!! 🤩😻🤩 Also: The red/blue network that corresponds with the cover image. Woot!!!
Great notes! I'm glad some of this stuff is landing in the way I hoped. And I'm not at all surprised that the frantic search in Boston will need some tweaking -- most of that was pretty fresh the week I published it.
Ah—there it is: what happened to Adam, told by anyone but Esther, good choice.
Having just lost a brother for less brutal, but still unexpected reasons, it’s brought my own tears.
Note: “singles’ ward”…did you explain earlier what that means for outside of your faith readers? I can’t remember.
Rita’s real and intimately personal compassion and purpose being unaltered by raging Esther is such a superb way to illustrate the depth of her profound maturity and wisdom.
Gorgeous imagery for Rita’s ship—pretty sure we all wish we we’re Jackson right now!
Yay for spaceships!!
Also BOOOO that Adam died. Friggin’ dagnabbit. I want to know more about how death works here, how humans/afterlife works, if he had become some sort of hybrid alien thing, if that is even an element of this universe, etcetera
I would also love to see from Adam’s perspective his last moments and the thoughts going through his head
Is there a clear way to know if we are in Jackson’s head vs Esther’s head at the beginning of these chapters? Usually with Esther we have that other character talking in all caps but I don’t know if I miss the Jackson differentiation. I knew when I got to “I had managed to completely convince myself that I hadn’t seen Rita invite Nali into some kind of space ship that night” and maybe you don’t want us to know until that moment, which if so it works perfectly. If not I was just mentioning it to mention it.
Alien shower sounds fun. Maybe it was enveloping from beneath? Or all sides at once? Or just normal but extra awesome haha
Daaaaaaang this is legitimately great drama with the confusing nature of Morning & Adam’s relationship. Now I also wanna know about Arch’s afterlife/death process.
Would have liked to know if the food tasted especially unique, or if it was a Narnia type thing where it was kind of whatever you wanted it to taste like kinda thing. Or if it had palpable healing/rejuvenation effects. Or if it was just like celestial burgers.
Definitely excited that we’re in space!
Fascinating. Just the name Nali and the flow of voice cued me in automatically that we were back in Jackson’s head. “Esther” as a third person confirmed it. Nice. 😻
Yeahhhh, I figured we’d lost Adam. Myyyyrh. You have a knack for investing me in really cool characters and then—YOINK! Ok, note to self. Don’t get attached. 😜 I think the discussion from the fire scenes stands even more now. With a little more mention of her frantic “where is he” you can build our hope through hers. Before you cruelly snatch it away! 😈😻😈 Esp because you do so through Jack’s eyes, not Esther’s heart. Otherwise this death feels a little detached and abrupt.
I laughed quite loudly when Rita swiped the floor away. Loving the look at our new home for the moment, and I squeeeeed when you delivered The Title!!! 🤩😻🤩 Also: The red/blue network that corresponds with the cover image. Woot!!!
Great notes! I'm glad some of this stuff is landing in the way I hoped. And I'm not at all surprised that the frantic search in Boston will need some tweaking -- most of that was pretty fresh the week I published it.
I am familiar with this concept. Baking and fermenting time always does a chapter good. Or brand-newb eyes. 😜
Ah—there it is: what happened to Adam, told by anyone but Esther, good choice.
Having just lost a brother for less brutal, but still unexpected reasons, it’s brought my own tears.
Note: “singles’ ward”…did you explain earlier what that means for outside of your faith readers? I can’t remember.
Rita’s real and intimately personal compassion and purpose being unaltered by raging Esther is such a superb way to illustrate the depth of her profound maturity and wisdom.
Gorgeous imagery for Rita’s ship—pretty sure we all wish we we’re Jackson right now!